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At times, I think Pythagoras was playing God
and that his law is that of a universal plan,
Mathematic yet organic, organized, chaotic, all in one,
our failure to see that is the altar and the lamb.

I build my conquests from an inner brink
I've stepped across in pride
I am at times, the emperor of Rome,
the moon, the flux and tide.

And I can stir emotion in my kings
And when I want, my eyes turn darkest black.
My flaws I don't possess, I never own,
Yet my downfall is always what I lack.

My fortuneteller plays the flute, you see
In notes which have no name,
I leave no hostages to fortune,
yet destiny remains the same.

At night, I dream, of unicorns and ghosts,
Of golden dust and vivid light,
But when I wake they're always gone,
and still no radiance in sight.

However, there are horizons
I've yet to see run dry,
And I have nerves and thoughts,
which counter all my sighs.

Remorse has every right to be a word,
but its meaning deserves imprisonment for life,
I've yet to finish my equation, my universal plan,
But I have hope to counter strife.
I never know in what category to put my poems in.
There should be a Literature -> Poetry -> Crazy one :crazy:

Let your minds wander...


self-criticism: The two last stanzas need more work. They sound broken. I have too many Buts and Ands and Yets [makes the poem sound like one long, annoying sentence].


Nu ştiu...
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inspired-by-fire Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009
Oh my goodness - i just realized this only has 7 faves, that's stupid!!
if i had a subscription i would feature you
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
thank you so much,
your words mean a lot to me
:hug:
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inspired-by-fire Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
I really mean it dear!
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inspired-by-fire Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009
i am in love with the first verse. i hate maths and think its unpredictable and do i really need to know Pythagoras theorem when i don't plan on being a builder or the such like??
my answer is no.
anyway, lovely piece!
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
You mustn't refuse the things you don't understand or their importance in this world.
I hated studying physics and maths in school. It was never my strong point, but I would love to understand them.

You'll start liking maths as soon as you stop having to memorise formulae, just like you'll start liking the literature they force you to read in school later on in life.
Knowledge is beautiful - all types. It's being forced to learn that's the horrible part.
:hug:
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inspired-by-fire Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009
yes definitely, knowledge is beautiful and something I do appreciate...I'm just really over having maths forced down my throat haha something I can't avoid I guess :heart::heart:
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strike2 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2009
Indeed, the words feel out of place in the last two stanzas.

The feel of the last stanza reminds me of Killer's Lullaby by Faithless:

Unless an escape route is found,
I'm going down underground
Into lifetimes of pain, it's absurd
The heaviest chain is contained is the sound of one word
So I'm referred back to hell
, huh
Just as well, I hate needles an' get twinges at the thought
of syringes


The meaning is different (banishing a word for its meaning), but somehow it felt familiar.


There's a world I have haven't yet seen.
But it's my fears that keep me in.
The warm feel of home.
And the cold outside.
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2009
I love those two verses in italics :heart:
Thank you so much for the comment :hug:
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strike2 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2009
You're so welcome :blushes:

I've stored all of my memories of a bad relationship in that song.
It seemed fitting.

If you're into deep, moody music, you might want to try Fiona Apple.
(especially the third CD, where everything seems to be going much better).
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2009
thanks for the recommendation :aww:
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random123321 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009
wonderful
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2009
thank you :thanks:
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leap-frog Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009
i fall in love with your soul more and more... every day
:floating:
great selection of words and the flow on thoughts!!
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2009
hehe :blush:
thank you very much :hug:
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leap-frog Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2009
:eyepopping:
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drefeyja Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009  Professional Photographer
bun bun :D and welcome back :) keep'em coming. eu una is in pana de inspiratie de vreun an :|
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009
si eu am fost pana acum vreo luna,
o pana mare de 2 ani! :rofl:
:hug:
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drefeyja Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2009  Professional Photographer
asa, sperie-ma :| :tears:
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Kiralyna Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009
Mie-mi suna bine si ultimele doua strofe. (Eu am mereu o groaza de "si"-uri in everything I write ^^;) Imi place cum inchid poezia (this especially is very powerful: "Remorse has every right to be a word, but its meaning deserves imprisonment for life").
Si titlul este foarte interesant ales :nod: imaginary worlds are so intriguing :giggle:
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009
si eu!... am multe poezii in care chiar incep cu "Si/And", de parca as continua o idee anterioara.
multumesc pentru comment si fav :hug:
PS: foarte dragut noul avatar :aww:
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Kiralyna Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2009
uneori ma deranjeaza la textele proprii ca am prea multe "si"-uri dar in poezia ta nu le-ai folosit in exces.
you're welcome,
multumesc si eu (I do love that picture :heart:)
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roxaralu Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009
Waw :D frumos
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009
multumesc :smooch:
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williamfdevault Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009  Professional Writer
Yes, but the buts and ands and yets are how people think. This flows like a thought, or rather a chain of thoughts.

I like it.
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LadyCrimson Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2009
especially when you start thinking in "what ifs..."

Thank you :hug:
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